Story Structure — 5 Plot Phases
The Unlikely Astronaut
NASA discovers a navigation problem and brings in Fred, the original programmer. After the true error is identified, Fred is tested and unexpectedly earns a place on the mission.
Key Events
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Mars Mission Navigation Glitch — NASA investigates an apparent navigation failure before the first human Mars mission. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Paul Wick
Location: NASA mission planning facility
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Original Programmer Recruited — NASA brings Fred in because he originally programmed the mission software. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Paul Wick
Location: NASA facility
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Software Error Revealed — Fred discovers that the apparent glitch comes from a mathematical error. Characters: Fred Z. Randall
Location: NASA computer laboratory
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Training Replacement Decision — After the computer specialist is injured, NASA decides to replace him rather than delay the mission. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Paul Wick
Location: NASA medical and training facilities
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Astronaut Testing Begins — Fred undergoes physical and practical exercises to determine whether he can become an astronaut. Characters: Fred Z. Randall
Location: NASA astronaut training center
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Training Records Broken — Fred performs unexpectedly well and breaks the records set by the mission commander. Characters: Fred Z. Randall
Location: NASA astronaut training center
Fear Before Liftoff
Fred initially refuses to board the Mars mission because he is afraid. Bud's bravery coin helps him overcome his hesitation and join the crew.
Key Events
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Fred Refuses The Mission — Fred panics before boarding and refuses to join the Mars mission. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Paul Wick
Location: Aries launch preparation area
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The Bravery Coin — Bud gives Fred a gold bravery coin and encourages him to face his fear. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Bud Nesbitt
Location: NASA launch facility
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Boarding The Aries — Fred and Julie board Aries for the Mars expedition. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Julie Ford
Location: Aries launch platform
Eight Months In Space
The crew travels toward Mars, but a hypersleep mix-up leaves Fred awake for almost the entire journey. He notices dangerous weather data while mission leadership fails to respond decisively.
Key Events
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Embarrassing Presidential Call — Fred accidentally leads a global singalong and humiliates the mission commander during a presidential call. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Julie Ford, The President
Location: Aries communications area
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Hypersleep Mix-Up — The trained chimpanzee takes Fred's chamber, forcing Fred into a smaller chamber. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Julie Ford
Location: Aries hypersleep chamber
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Eight Months Awake — Fred sleeps for only thirteen minutes and remains awake for the eight-month journey. Characters: Fred Z. Randall
Location: Aries interior
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Sandstorm Warning Detected — Fred detects severe sandstorms and warns Bud, but Paul initially ignores the danger. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Bud Nesbitt, Paul Wick
Location: Aries and Houston mission control
The Storm On Mars
The crew reaches Mars and Fred accidentally makes the first landing. Early sandstorms then force an emergency departure and expose serious weaknesses in mission command.
Key Events
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Arrival At Mars — The crew reaches Mars and prepares the lander for surface operations. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Julie Ford
Location: Martian surface
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Accidental First Footprint — Fred slips from the ladder and accidentally becomes the first person to step onto Mars. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Julie Ford
Location: Pilgrim 1 landing site
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Sandstorms Arrive Early — The sandstorms arrive ahead of schedule and nearly separate the crew during surface operations. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Julie Ford
Location: Martian surface
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Emergency Mars Liftoff — The crew launches from Mars while mission command changes after Paul's lack of trust becomes clear. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Julie Ford, Bud Nesbitt, Paul Wick
Location: Mars ascent area and Houston mission control
The Coin In The Circuit
A damaged lander loses power during the escape from Mars. Fred restores the system with the bravery coin, allowing the crew to return safely to Aries before the story closes on comic relief.
Key Events
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Pilgrim 1 Loses Power — Windblown rocks strike the lander, cutting power and sending it into an uncontrolled spin. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Julie Ford
Location: Pilgrim 1 during ascent
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Coin Restores The Circuit — With seconds remaining, Fred completes the circuit by inserting Bud's commemorative coin. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Julie Ford
Location: Pilgrim 1 cockpit
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Safe Return To Aries — The crew safely returns to Aries after surviving the damaged lander's emergency ascent. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Julie Ford
Location: Aries orbiting Mars
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Zero Gravity Dance — Fred asks Julie to dance in zero gravity while wearing improvised formal clothes. Characters: Fred Z. Randall, Julie Ford
Location: Aries cabin
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Second Hypersleep Dispute — The chimpanzee again takes Fred's chamber as Aries begins the eight-month journey home. Characters: Fred Z. Randall
Location: Aries hypersleep chamber
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Missing Mars Flag — A post-credits reveal shows Fred's substitute flag missing and being worn by a Martian. Characters: Fred Z. Randall
Location: Martian surface